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Post by australasia on May 18, 2004 17:16:41 GMT -5
Cant wait for the next part it seems almost impossible for he to get out of this one. you can spell the long word for ect.! im so jelos (sp?)
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Post by smogemogirl323 on May 18, 2004 19:26:14 GMT -5
cool fics so josie was in the body of the rat if my english don't make some weird word (i mean i don't talk english all my day so...) bye bhgirl
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Post by Tommy on May 19, 2004 3:41:29 GMT -5
i knowe loads o big words like anthropomorphic [every1 get out ur dictionary coz i can't spell] i must admit i forgot how to spell nocturnal [wasn't sure if it woz noctournal] so my m8 nathan helped me spell that but that's the only word i had help with.
Well i hav 2 pet rats and they're really nosy.
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Post by HailStorm on May 19, 2004 16:18:42 GMT -5
I've read part 1 and it's very nice so far. Except for one thing: Marshall is out of character, very much so. Remeber Cold and how he absolutely refused to admit there was a problem despite feeling terrible? He had to be ordered to bed, dragged and pushed to his room and Lucas and Josie had to force feed him remedies. He wouldn't make a big deal out of a scratch, it's just not him. Plus do watch the Britishisms, by the way. You're getting better but Corrine wouldn't say 'That flipping thing' - it's too British, she'd say 'That freaking thing' or similar - it's not a major bad point, just something that will make your characterisation a bit better. Keep going though (i'm sorry if my reviews seem a bit harsh, but I do try to be constructive - it's the sort of review I appreciate most when I write)
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Post by Tommy on May 20, 2004 3:35:19 GMT -5
Yeah i know i made marshall a bit off but i didn't want Lucas to have to act like a baby because he';s needed later on. I never noticed the 'flipping' thing coz i was half asleep i'll edit that now. sorry.
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Post by smogemogirl323 on May 20, 2004 10:32:51 GMT -5
Yeah i know i made marshall a bit off but i didn't want Lucas to have to act like a baby because he';s needed later on. I never noticed the 'flipping' thing coz i was half asleep i'll edit that now. sorry. please can you make a end of it i was waiting bakalistange!
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Post by Tommy on May 20, 2004 14:46:03 GMT -5
i was waiting bakalistange! pardon?
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Post by smogemogirl323 on May 21, 2004 20:49:52 GMT -5
soz i wùs waiting. but i see that, and that so cool bravo tommy.
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Post by Tommy on May 23, 2004 6:42:17 GMT -5
Lol u see now why i couldn't have Lucas scared of Josie? It wouldn't have been as 'special' if it was Marshall who knew now would it! I think i added that to twist the whole J/V/L Thing lol.
[ps: I was going to have her originally talk but after watching one of my rats try her hand at typing [she slipped onta the keyboard] i decided it was funnier to have her type]
pps: Rats can't type
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Post by smogemogirl323 on May 24, 2004 8:35:02 GMT -5
er yes they can't type if you see a rat (EW) type pm me. lol bhgirl
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Post by Tommy on May 26, 2004 14:41:56 GMT -5
yes well the next part is up [sorry i made J blonde it was just summat i thought i'd experiment with]
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Post by And the rest is history!~ on Jun 22, 2005 1:55:02 GMT -5
oh it's okay. I think it was funny but it would have been nicer and funnier, perhaps, to see their reactions to her being blonde as a human. But it's so GOOD. And I've read a couple of your fanfics already... I can't believe you actually finished one. Lol... I'm sorry.. I'm not being mean but it's just that ppl always wrote that yours are so good but never finished. I'm really glad, though. Although, I'm kind of surprised that this is the end because it seems like it should have continued. Please think about it and let me know. Thanks and just pm me instead of writing it on here because I may forget to check. Thanks for writing and please continue your other stories/fanfics. Lol... see ya!
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Post by Kitten ♥ Lovell on Jun 24, 2005 2:39:01 GMT -5
I am actually very glad I finished this one.... yay. My others should eventually be finished (Yeah I know some not updated for over a year but.... *Sighs* I blame Television)
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Post by MirrorCard on Jun 25, 2005 2:28:14 GMT -5
I am actually very glad I finished this one.... yay. My others should eventually be finished (Yeah I know some not updated for over a year but.... *Sighs* I blame Television) yes, television is addicting *drools*
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Post by syd26 on Jun 24, 2006 14:54:41 GMT -5
Great story
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