Responses: Insomnia

[Gouki]

Here it is, my tour deforce. Personally my favourite of my fics (except for One More Finale, but that doesn't count, just so I can say this is my favourite as well). It ties up a lot of plots from previous fics. Sadly, with the advent of season three and Conclusions, the story now doesn't fit into continuity at all.

I've tried to put some mystery into it as well, but that doesn't start until later. The first few chapters are scene setting. After that it really gets into it.

For relveant reading (if you need any points clarified):
Aftermath
Response.

One More Finale
Responses.

Personally, I just think it flows really well, especially the dialogue. I mean, I know that sounds really self-absorbed.

If anything, the chapters are a bit short though. I'm aware of that. It made posting the first three chapters alot easier to post, though.

[paus]

I really enjoyed reading your fic, I think it's really good. Like you said before, it flows really well and the story is interesting. I read both Aftermath and One More Finaly also, I want to, need to know how this one ends. Keep on writing, please.

[Gouki]

I have decided to finish posting Insomnia. To take away from the fact that I have not finished a couple of small ficlets, yet.

Now. It's starting to get into the crux of the mystery. So. Enjoy. And, yeah, I have changed somethings. And the super!Angst is because I love the characters. I from the Joss Whedon/Rockne S. OBannon school of writing. I hurt them because I love them. Some parts of it are done intentionally. I wanted to keep the Josie story from the last two going, but somewhat mysterious, and having her in a very dark place, which is why she is involved with the main storyline.

I wanted to have Tyler/Madison have an interest in each other mostly for comedy. And Lucas Marshall is also somewhat light-hearted in places, for contrast.

Oh, yeah, chapter seven? Songwriting props go to Sarah McLachlan. I can totally not write songs. At all. Ever.

Then I wanted to blow it all to hell. Have fun.

[HailStorm]

Oh so Insomnia will finally be finished some time? Super! I really need to read it all again carefully - I'm not sure if I remember enough about it to follow new chapters properly. I remember the Tyler/Madison though - good pairing And you win points for the songs used

[Gouki]

Whee! All fourteen chapters are up and running. Oh, yeah, this post contains SPOILERS FOR THE LAST FEW CHAPTERS AND RUINS THE MYSTERY, READ IT BEFORE READING THIS!!!!

Actually, I have to say, I don't like marking this story as slash, becasue while it does have a slash plot running through it, it isn't really the major focus, in my mind.


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A couple of pointers:

Ms. Meeder was very much crazycrazycrazy. The Janitor had been given orders to not apprehend her, as the real Sarah knew what was going to happen.

I really love making Tyler/Madison snark so much. I swear they would fit in so well at Wolfram & Hart.

Corrine Stew is really fun to write. Originally, I was going to have a subplot with Vaughn/Corrine/Stew. But, it got cut. Along with many, many other things to make it flow better.

I changed a couple of things to link in with the themes of the series, and the eventual resolutions of various plots, despite taking place in an AU. It doesn't change any of the myhtos reveals in Season 3 or Conclusions.

I wanted it end on a strangely upbeat, yet still disturbingly depressing if you thought about it, ending.

[HailStorm]

Ok, I've finally read it all the way through again, in between lectures and trips to the pub to 'window shopping' and it was deffinitely worth spending the time on
I love the M/L, of course, and the Corrine/Stew. Madison and Tyler are very funny - they could have their own very snarky spin-off
For some reson, I really loved this line:
""What's wrong Amanda?" Victor asked. "What scares you more? That I have friends? Or that I have old friends?"" I can just hear Victor saying that. Quite... sinister in tone without the words themselves being explicitly spooky.
I also liked:
"I should go. Back to Marshall. I couldn't pump anything out of you, so I figure I'll keep Marshall warm."

Vaughn's entire body dropped, as his eyes grew wider at what Lucas had said.

"I really just said that, didn't I?""
because it's a bit naughty and it made me giggle XD
Miss Meeder was very creepy indeed. A very creepy idea... *shudder*

All in all, I love your writing. It doesn't sound exactly like the series, but then that's what fanfic's for - telling it in your own voice. I like how you mix some quite dark themes and ideas with humor and classic snark. Legend!

[Gouki]

hailstorm said:

All in all, I love your writing. It doesn't sound exactly like the series, but then that's what fanfic's for - telling it in your own voice. I like how you mix some quite dark themes and ideas with humor and classic snark. Legend!

I think that's my biggest problem with it (although, it is my equal favourite, with One More Finale, because it's my most ambitious fic). It does get a pretty non-BHH at times. It doesn't help that I abandoned science for pseudo-science. I just prefer to have the characters tell the stories.

PS. Please get everyone else to read it.

[Gideon]

I've read eight chapters so far, Gouki, and I really enjoy [i[Insomnia[/i]. Since you've seen most, or all, of the episodes, you of course pretty much know how the characters are going to talk, think and act, and you write accordingly. It reads like an episode too - what I mean by that, is that I can completely imagine watching Insomnia as an episode.

I also love the complicated relationships you have the characters involved in, particularly Lucas and Vaughn's kiss, and I love the very strong implications of Marshall's feelings for Lucas. I get the impression from this that you like exploring the relationships between the characters in great detail; is that right?

[Gouki]

gideon said:

I've read eight chapters so far, Gouki, and I really enjoy [i[Insomnia

[/i]. Since you've seen most, or all, of the episodes, you of course pretty much know how the characters are going to talk, think and act, and you write accordingly.[/quote]

I actually started writing this when I only just started being able to watch episodes reguarly. But, thank you.

I also love the complicated relationships you have the characters involved in, particularly Lucas and Vaughn's kiss, and I love the very strong implications of Marshall's feelings for Lucas.

Well, they're all sixteenish, and have been inside each others heads. Literally. They have a lot of issues to work out with their deepest darkest fears commong knowledge amongst the group.

I get the impression from this that you like exploring the relationships between the characters in great detail; is that right?

Character relationships and the wacky hijinks that ensue from said relationships are what I let drive the story. They're most important to me. I normally have a basic idea of where I want it to end, but otherwise I make it up as I go along.