Responses to: nocturnal

[australasia]

Cant wait for the next part it seems almost impossible for he to get out of this one. you can spell the long word for ect.! im so jelos (sp?)

[smogemogirl323]

cool fics so josie was in the body of the rat if my english don't make some weird word (i mean i don't talk english all my day so...)
bye
bhgirl

[Tommy]

i knowe loads o big words like anthropomorphic [every1 get out ur dictionary coz i can't spell] i must admit i forgot how to spell nocturnal [wasn't sure if it woz noctournal] so my m8 nathan helped me spell that but that's the only word i had help with.

Well i hav 2 pet rats and they're really nosy.

[HailStorm]

I've read part 1 and it's very nice so far.
Except for one thing: Marshall is out of character, very much so. Remeber Cold and how he absolutely refused to admit there was a problem despite feeling terrible? He had to be ordered to bed, dragged and pushed to his room and Lucas and Josie had to force feed him remedies. He wouldn't make a big deal out of a scratch, it's just not him.
Plus do watch the Britishisms, by the way. You're getting better but Corrine wouldn't say 'That flipping thing' - it's too British, she'd say 'That freaking thing' or similar - it's not a major bad point, just something that will make your characterisation a bit better.
Keep going though (i'm sorry if my reviews seem a bit harsh, but I do try to be constructive - it's the sort of review I appreciate most when I write)

[Tommy]

Yeah i know i made marshall a bit off but i didn't want Lucas to have to act like a baby because he';s needed later on. I never noticed the 'flipping' thing coz i was half asleep i'll edit that now. sorry.

[smogemogirl323]

Tommy said:

Yeah i know i made marshall a bit off but i didn't want Lucas to have to act like a baby because he';s needed later on. I never noticed the 'flipping' thing coz i was half asleep i'll edit that now. sorry.

please can you make a
end of it i was waiting bakalistange!

[Tommy]

bhgirl said:

i was waiting bakalistange!

pardon?

[smogemogirl323]

soz i wùs waiting. but i see that, and that so cool bravo tommy.

[Tommy]

Lol u see now why i couldn't have Lucas scared of Josie? It wouldn't have been as 'special' if it was Marshall who knew now would it! I think i added that to twist the whole J/V/L Thing lol.

[ps: I was going to have her originally talk but after watching one of my rats try her hand at typing [she slipped onta the keyboard] i decided it was funnier to have her type]

pps: Rats can't type

[smogemogirl323]

Tommy said:

pps: Rats can't type

er yes they can't type
if you see a rat (EW) type pm me. lol
bhgirl

[Tommy]

yes well the next part is up [sorry i made J blonde it was just summat i thought i'd experiment with]

[And the rest is history!~]

oh it's okay. I think it was funny but it would have been nicer and funnier, perhaps, to see their reactions to her being blonde as a human. But it's so GOOD. And I've read a couple of your fanfics already... I can't believe you actually finished one. Lol... I'm sorry.. I'm not being mean but it's just that ppl always wrote that yours are so good but never finished. I'm really glad, though. Although, I'm kind of surprised that this is the end because it seems like it should have continued. Please think about it and let me know. Thanks and just pm me instead of writing it on here because I may forget to check. Thanks for writing and please continue your other stories/fanfics. Lol... see ya!

[Kitten ♥ Lovell]

I am actually very glad I finished this one.... yay. My others should eventually be finished (Yeah I know some not updated for over a year but.... *Sighs* I blame Television)

[MirrorCard]

gingersnap said:

I am actually very glad I finished this one.... yay. My others should eventually be finished (Yeah I know some not updated for over a year but.... *Sighs* I blame Television)

yes, television is addicting *drools*

[syd26]

Great story